Friday, January 31, 2014

Poem

I am a puppy
Sometimes too nice
Hardly too mean

People see always
The good in me
But never
The bad

You may not
Know me
The Angry
and mean side

I am sweet
But yet sour

I can be shy
At first
But later I will be friendly

I can be active
And I can be lazy

If you threaten
My family
I will be fiesty
But other than that
I will be easy going
The end





3 comments:

  1. Hi Bri, I likehow you compare the personality traits of a puppy to yourself. If you could also talk about the actions of a puppy to the things in your life that would be amaaaazaayn ;)

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  2. HELLO THERE BRIANNE. So while i was reading your poem, which was amazing by the way, I could tell that being a puppy was very similar to your life. But the one thing is, you didn't really talk about the like puppy ya knoww. Like there's like the sense of knowing your a puppy in the beginning but you should try to keep that up. OKAY BYE BRIANNE I THOUGHT YOUR POEM WAS (IN THE VOICE OF A DOG) OUWHHOOT-STANDING AHAHA GET IT CAUSE OUTSTANDING nvm ok bye lol

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  3. you need to do a little more explaining of why you are these things, everything seems to be just a bit too short. Explain things more and make sure you discuss how it can be a puppy. Also as Jonas stated you only stated in the beginning that you are a puppy but never mentioned it again. AS(2)

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