Monday, February 2, 2015
Thursday, January 29, 2015
Allusion Poem
Everyday is the same routine
you can't control me
you can't control anything about me
not my actions
nor thoughts
nothing you just can't control it
you can't control me
my fairy godmother by my side
everything is possible with her when she's here
she will defend me
not you
One wave of her magic wand
Poof, be gone!
i have been waiting for this
you can never see me coming now
never
day by day
night by night
you don't know how I feel
or what its like
being under your commands
constantly telling me what to do
i just can't stand your demands
they're just useless
just useless
The two sisters
standing right in front of me
just staring at me
glaring me down
with your big brown eyes
you can't control me
you can't control anything about me
not my actions
nor thoughts
nothing you just can't control it
you can't control me
my fairy godmother by my side
everything is possible with her when she's here
she will defend me
not you
One wave of her magic wand
Poof, be gone!
i have been waiting for this
you can never see me coming now
never
Wednesday, January 14, 2015
Thursday, December 18, 2014
Parent commenting plus portfolio
ENGLISH PORTFOLIO: http://brisumida.wix.com/briannesumida
PARENT COMMENT: Good job with your work this semester. You are making progress in your writing skills. Remember to check for spelling and grammar errors. I am glad that you have been more responsible about your work. Try to be a quality producer--STRIVE to do a good job on every assignment. I liked reading your "Coming of Age" essay. You had a lot of voice in your writing.
I would like you to fully understand the writing assignment. Support your writing with details and remember "chunky paragraph".
I would like you to fully understand the writing assignment. Support your writing with details and remember "chunky paragraph".
Friday, December 5, 2014
Angry letter (draft)
1544 Haku Street
Honolulu, Hawaii, 96819
December 3, 2014
Shimazu Store
330 North School Street
Honolulu, HI 96817
Dear Shimazu Administration,
My family and I have been going to your store for many years to eat shave ice, even when it used to be B&S Store. Every time we were around the Liliha area, my sisters and I would beg our parents or grandparents to go to your store, wait in the long line, and eat shave ice, especially the strawberry.
However, recently we have had some concerns about the prices of your shave ice. Just last weekend my family and I went to your store to eat shave ice and found out that your prices have gotten extremely high. I noticed that throughout the years that I have been going, your prices have risen from about $2.25 to the current cost of $4.00. I understand that the size of your shave ice is huge and there are many different favors to choose from, however, the price is to high for a weekly treat. Many customers also want to add toppings such as azuki beans, mocha balls, condensed milk, or li hing powder. These additions cost 75 cents or more for EACH topping!
Although you have the best shave ice on the island, spending $5.00 for an afternoon snack is more expensive than two school lunches! Perhaps making a smaller sized shave ice for a reasonable price would be better for young children who cannot finish an entire shave ice by themselves.
Shimazu shave ice is a well-known treat and should be enjoyed by all. If your prices were more reasonable, we would be able to enjoy your shave ice regularly, not just as a once in awhile treat.
I understand that since your shave ice is so popular that even if you raise your prices, people will still come. But I feel that your longtime regular customers, like my family and me, will not be able to continue to enjoy our favorite strawberry shave ice as often as we would like.
Sincerely,
Brianne Sumida
Honolulu, Hawaii, 96819
December 3, 2014
Shimazu Store
330 North School Street
Honolulu, HI 96817
Dear Shimazu Administration,
My family and I have been going to your store for many years to eat shave ice, even when it used to be B&S Store. Every time we were around the Liliha area, my sisters and I would beg our parents or grandparents to go to your store, wait in the long line, and eat shave ice, especially the strawberry.
However, recently we have had some concerns about the prices of your shave ice. Just last weekend my family and I went to your store to eat shave ice and found out that your prices have gotten extremely high. I noticed that throughout the years that I have been going, your prices have risen from about $2.25 to the current cost of $4.00. I understand that the size of your shave ice is huge and there are many different favors to choose from, however, the price is to high for a weekly treat. Many customers also want to add toppings such as azuki beans, mocha balls, condensed milk, or li hing powder. These additions cost 75 cents or more for EACH topping!
Although you have the best shave ice on the island, spending $5.00 for an afternoon snack is more expensive than two school lunches! Perhaps making a smaller sized shave ice for a reasonable price would be better for young children who cannot finish an entire shave ice by themselves.
Shimazu shave ice is a well-known treat and should be enjoyed by all. If your prices were more reasonable, we would be able to enjoy your shave ice regularly, not just as a once in awhile treat.
I understand that since your shave ice is so popular that even if you raise your prices, people will still come. But I feel that your longtime regular customers, like my family and me, will not be able to continue to enjoy our favorite strawberry shave ice as often as we would like.
Sincerely,
Brianne Sumida
Saturday, November 15, 2014
Cyber bullying final draft
Technology today has changed and improved over the years. All these new apps that help us keep in touch with all the different events in the world can lead to cyber bullying. Typically, to bully a person by use of electronics communication is sending messages of an intimidating or threatening nature. Cyber bullies nowadays use apps such as Snapchat, Instagram, Facebook, and Myspace to intimidate others.
Today, nearly 43% of teenagers have been bullied online. One in four occasions happened more then once. Scientists show that most of the kids that are being cyber bullied get bullied in person as well. The newer the technology, the easier it will become for someone to get bullied. Most of the time, when someone gets bullied online, they are least likely to get caught, because they can just do it anonymously. It was proven that many teens who get cyber bullied are most likely to use alcohol, drugs, skip school, or even receive poor grades.
Throughout the last decade, there have been many tragic cases of young teens being cyber bullied. For example, Tina Meier committed suicide because of her weight at the age of 13. She added a guy named John on Myspace and started talking to him. She said that he was one of the few people who thought she was pretty, but a while later he started saying things like "the world would be better off without you." That's when she committed suicide. Committing suicide is one of the most tragic thing young teens do when they become cyber bullied.
Sources say that cyber bullying consists of sending or posting cruel messages, photos or videos on the internet or any electronic media with intent of damaging the reputation of the target. Many victims of cyber bullying tend to change the way they act or dress. Most of the time they change their personality into someone totally different from themselves. They keep that different personality hoping that the person bullying them would stop. Most of the time, the bully would keep harassing them until they break.
Today, teenagers think that cyber bullying isn't a big deal but it is! The kids that have been cyber bullied have a hard time standing up for themselves. They think that the bully is more powerful then themselves. This causes them to loose the confidence they once had in themselves. Cyber bullying is a terrible thing which can cause depression, sadness, loneliness, and even suicide.
Today, nearly 43% of teenagers have been bullied online. One in four occasions happened more then once. Scientists show that most of the kids that are being cyber bullied get bullied in person as well. The newer the technology, the easier it will become for someone to get bullied. Most of the time, when someone gets bullied online, they are least likely to get caught, because they can just do it anonymously. It was proven that many teens who get cyber bullied are most likely to use alcohol, drugs, skip school, or even receive poor grades.
Throughout the last decade, there have been many tragic cases of young teens being cyber bullied. For example, Tina Meier committed suicide because of her weight at the age of 13. She added a guy named John on Myspace and started talking to him. She said that he was one of the few people who thought she was pretty, but a while later he started saying things like "the world would be better off without you." That's when she committed suicide. Committing suicide is one of the most tragic thing young teens do when they become cyber bullied.
Sources say that cyber bullying consists of sending or posting cruel messages, photos or videos on the internet or any electronic media with intent of damaging the reputation of the target. Many victims of cyber bullying tend to change the way they act or dress. Most of the time they change their personality into someone totally different from themselves. They keep that different personality hoping that the person bullying them would stop. Most of the time, the bully would keep harassing them until they break.
Today, teenagers think that cyber bullying isn't a big deal but it is! The kids that have been cyber bullied have a hard time standing up for themselves. They think that the bully is more powerful then themselves. This causes them to loose the confidence they once had in themselves. Cyber bullying is a terrible thing which can cause depression, sadness, loneliness, and even suicide.
Sunday, November 2, 2014
Risky business Rough draft (cyberbullying)
Cyber bullying for very few people could be a good thing like gaining self confidence for people who don't have any confidence, but for most people its a terrible thing for someone to do. It can cause so many problems for the kids that had been cyber bullied, for instance feeling sadness & loneliness, having the lost if interest they enjoyed doing in the pas before they were bullied, and even committing too suiccide. Now days we have so much technology most people find useful and helpful. Just think a little for a moment about what technology can do to kids now days like cyber bullying.
Now days social media has so many goods and bade about it. This depends on how you use these different social media sites or apps. For some people they really don't like so social media even though it's a really helpful source. But people take that source for granted by cyber bullying people. When people get cyber bullied they tend to start feeling sad&lonley. When they start to get those feels they start to exclude there self for the social life and most of there friends.
Cyber bullying has so many affects that people can have when one is cyber bullied the most common is probably comitting to suiccide. Now days if you see on the news or newspaper you here every so often someone committed to suiccide. Mostly if kids committe to suiccide now days it probably from cyberbullying. This affect is one of the most horrifying thing anyone can do. This is one of the most horrible affects to suiccide.
The last affect of cyber bullying and how it is cause by social media is having the list of interest of things they enjoyed doing before they were cyber bullied. this is the most tragic one because it's like losing all you hobbies you have enjoyed and it just dissapears. Many kids might have this problem because they could have been cyber bullied on the sport they played or what they enjoyed or liked. This is why cyberbullying can cause the lost of interest of things they enjoyed dong before they were bullied.
Cyber bullying to some people can be a good thing like gaining self confidence, but too most people it's a terrible thing for some one to do it can cause suiccide, the lack of sadness&lonliness, and the Lost of interest of things they enjoyed during before they were bullied. This is only one of the many problems social media can cause If you don't use it in the right way.
Now days social media has so many goods and bade about it. This depends on how you use these different social media sites or apps. For some people they really don't like so social media even though it's a really helpful source. But people take that source for granted by cyber bullying people. When people get cyber bullied they tend to start feeling sad&lonley. When they start to get those feels they start to exclude there self for the social life and most of there friends.
Cyber bullying has so many affects that people can have when one is cyber bullied the most common is probably comitting to suiccide. Now days if you see on the news or newspaper you here every so often someone committed to suiccide. Mostly if kids committe to suiccide now days it probably from cyberbullying. This affect is one of the most horrifying thing anyone can do. This is one of the most horrible affects to suiccide.
The last affect of cyber bullying and how it is cause by social media is having the list of interest of things they enjoyed doing before they were cyber bullied. this is the most tragic one because it's like losing all you hobbies you have enjoyed and it just dissapears. Many kids might have this problem because they could have been cyber bullied on the sport they played or what they enjoyed or liked. This is why cyberbullying can cause the lost of interest of things they enjoyed dong before they were bullied.
Cyber bullying to some people can be a good thing like gaining self confidence, but too most people it's a terrible thing for some one to do it can cause suiccide, the lack of sadness&lonliness, and the Lost of interest of things they enjoyed during before they were bullied. This is only one of the many problems social media can cause If you don't use it in the right way.
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